Michael : Michael’s A2 Work : Ancillary Task 2 : TASK

First Edit

Upon making this magazine spread, I am happy with it for a first edit. There is a direct colour scheme and more than just the review in the form of text. The content of the text is currently in Latin as I wanted to fill the space for my first edit. I also incorporated a rating system using stars, which is an effective way of showing the review. The grey boxes represent screenshots from the movie which will be put in with the next edit. I will also bring the header saying ‘New Release’ down a bit so the text is not touching the top. I may also change the main picture in focus to a screenshot of the movie, but I will wait for audience feedback to inform me about this.

Feedback:

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To Do List:

  • Bring the text on the header down
  • FIll the white space in the bottom-middle of the spread.
  • Change the picture
  • Write a review to replace the Latin.
  • Put screenshots of the movie in.

Second Edit

I am much happier with this edit. I stuck to the red colour scheme with white writing. The white matches my film and my poster, and the red is symbolic of the main character’s anger, particularly the scenes when a red filter goes over him.

I also added a big quote that separates the paragraph, a graph, a director’s bio, a ‘Look Closer’ section, and added a box which says ‘Review’.

The most obvious change is the use of pictures. I feel like this screenshot of the film is more representative of the film than the picture I took before.

Feedback

To do:

  • A few structural alterations to make the magazine more aesthetic.
  • Write the review itself using various language technique.
  • Research film review structure to aid in the writing of my review
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This ‘Total Film’ Review of Skyfall was a very differently worded article to the review of ‘The Big Short’
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Reviewed by the same magazine, this film review has a much different structure to it

Furthermore, I made a guideline to help me write a review for myself:

FILM REVIEW STRUCTURE

Headline

  • Title of film
  • Play on words
  • Rhyme
  • Cliché

1st Paragraph

  • Gives background into the film and its creation
  • Usually begins with features associated with a key director/producer/actor.
  • May reference key features with certain films/ genres
  • Puts us in the setting (At 5PM in Eminönü Square in the Faith District of Istanbul…)

2nd Paragraph

  • Introduces the plot
  • Mentions directorial/ acting details
  • References the placement of setting and says why it is common or uncommon of that film

3rd Paragraph

  • Mention the opposing tensions in the plot
  • Quotes from actors/directors
  • Get a feeling for what is at stake because of being submerged in the plot.

4th Paragraph

  • The review
  • Uses evidence to back up why it is good/bad
  • Reference to the director/ franchise’s previous films and why they are better/worse

5th Paragraph

  • Gives a general overview to conclude why the film was good/bad
  • Statistics to back it up
  • Conclude with a director’s quote that shows their aims/ ambitions for the film/ franchise.

Language Features

  • Pun
  • Cliché
  • Quotes
  • Direct Address
  • Repetition of names
  • Storylike
  • Descriptive writing
  • Emotive nouns
  • Alliteration

Structure Features

  • Columns
  • Little Paragraphs
  • Large first letter
  • Repetition of idea

Voice

  • Very clearly opinion based
  • Spoken like a professional, opinion is valued
  • 3rd Person narrative
  • Chatty/ Casual but sophisticated vocabulary.

Layout/ Design Features Writing is anchored to

  • Headline is large
  • Headline and subheadline set the tone of positivity or negativity.
  • Image is focused on in review

Final Edit

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This is the full image. As this image cannot be enlarged I have put each page beneath it so it can be read. This is what the magazine looks like with joint pages

My third and final edit. I decided to add a third colour to my house style in grey. This was to coincide with the still image in the text. Furthermore, I changed the style of the font for the heading and changed my star styles. I also had the colour scheme follow a pattern where there was enough grey to balance out flashes of red and vice versa. I also layered my image, adding a picture of myself, held on by a paperclip, giving the image much greater depth. I also added a sole letter at the beginning of the paragraph as it fits conventions of most film review magazines.

 

Feedback

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    The layout of the pages in this magazine is what you would expect to see in an article. The title is large enough to make the reader take a look at the story. The photo makes you curious enough to read further. The fonts all seem in order.. All in all it would attract me enogh to investigate this article.

  2. I think it’s really very good, but for the main title “new release” I don’t think its positions well, maybe put it more into the black (lower more into the black). However, you’ve already said you’ll do this.
    Also, the box in the bottom right of the picture just needs a tidy up on size and maybe font, it just doesn’t look as incorporated into the the whole thing as it should.

  3. I like the colour scheme and the “verdict” and “did you know boxes” because they grab the reader’s attention right away and can lead to them reading the entire article. However, I think the large photo would be more effective on the left, just under the title so that the reader sees the title and then sees a screenshot from the film to give them a good first idea of what it’s about. I also think “Snow” as well as the rest of the font should be larger. Overall, well done.

  4. I think the lay out is GREAT. It catches my attention to want to read what the content is about. If it was in English then I would be able to get a better understanding. All in all very well presented.

  5. I think the article is very attractive and certainly catches the eye. I love the Did You Know section and the large sized photo. Article looks very well presented and attractive unfortunately I think it’s in French and therefore I can’t read it. Wish it were in English. It looks very inviting and interesting to read. Great presentation

  6. I’m my opinion the second edit is a lot stronger. I think that the picture is more effective as it shows a moment from the film. The directors bio and the predicted box office is really effective as the review isn’t just writing. Could you add more pictures to entice people in to reading it, it might make them more interested in the film. Overall, it’s a v strong edit!

  7. The second edit without a doubt draws further attention the bold red highligheted sections stand out with clear bold font.
    Maybe fill in the bottom right boxes so they cover entire section in line with the picture. Overall , I feel this brings to light what one would expect to see in an article, bringing accross the story to the readers.

  8. Really like the new red and white design, lovely use of statistics in the graph. Possibly lower ‘REVIEW’ so it is line with ‘SNOW’ and ‘OUT 13th MARCH’. The new image is a lot better than the old one 👌🏾

  9. The article has a really good eye to detail, evident in the statistical graph at the bottom of the second page. Additionally, the red font on the title page makes the article stand out, and is effective in that it is symbolic of the danger associated with drug abuse- the topic which you’ve chosen to portray. Finally, the brief plot summary is successful in that you’ve phrased it with just the right amount information given to not give to much away to a future audience.

  10. The layout is really good and I like the use of the colour red to fit with your branding. Just a small detail, I feel like your photo should start just on the right page and not a bit on the left? Also is the middle bit at the bottom going to stay blank? Apart from that, I really like it!

  11. Your second edit is really strong. I like how you’ve matched the layout colours with the image you decided to use. The layout looks awesome!

    However, I feel as though the top left of the spread is a bit busy with words. Maybe you could remove or re-position some of the words so it’s less ‘hectic’ around that area? And, like Hannah said above, I feel like the image should be further to the right of the spread as it is slightly on the left page.

    I really like it so far!

  12. Well done for you final edit, it looks great! I really like the grey gradient and the way it matches with the red. The red quote is also very effective and the picture of the director, added with a paperclip looks very proffesional!

  13. Your final edit is amazing. It is really professional and eye-catching – I would definitely watch the film after reading this spread. The layout is really clean, and I like how you have branded the spread to make the colour scheme similar to that of your other products. The graph provides potential audience members with statistical evidence that the film will be successful, and it means that audiences can trust that it’s a good film. Well done!

  14. Third and final edit
    The use of the 3rd colour Grey certainly adds depth to the page also enhancing the red.. The use of red I think was particularly important in pointing out the danger associated with drugs.
    The clipboard addition showing a small passport shot of the editor adds a modern flare to the piece, however maybe could have been added lower down so not to take away from the main shot. .. I think the final edit overall is well thought out, creative in the editors thinking to perhaps draw it’s attention to a younger reader given the topics very nature.

  15. Looks really good! The text gives a strong insight into what the film is about, including in depth details on where you feel it particularly excels! Additionally, I think including comments from the cast was a really good idea in that it insight not only comes from you from a director’s perspective, but also the actors themselves, on the way the script was devised and how effective the message was conveyed. The grey background on the title certainly makes the red stand out even more in comparison to the white background in the previous edit. Really good eye to detail, well done!

  16. The layout is great except i would use a black background with red lettering so as to grab quick attention. All in all very professional

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